Is this a good poem i wrote it in like 10 min.?

I really like the fact that you have a rhyming poem for those are few and far between. I can think of words but rhyming cannot fully express what I feel and it is just very difficult to achieve for me. I like this particular poem. I am sure many can relate maybe not in the same way. but it has very strong and powerful emotion. As well as the word "thy" makes it different from many of the poems you hear from more modern days. That word almost does not exist. Let me know of anymore you have so I could see your work.Very good job.